I'm not sure what you used to capture or edit, but the quality is pretty low, fps jitters etc. If it was vegas there are TONS of tutorials on youtube on how to render etc , I would recommend looking at a couple.
There are also TONS of videos on things such as transitions / fading clips , you should look some of those up also. The way it was done, even if a clip is pretty impressive , it just felt very rushed. I didn't get that moment to enjoy what i just saw because the next one was instantly there opposed to a nice gradual flow from one to the next. Imho a "good" edit isn't necessarily about how amazing the clip is , but rather how well they all fit together with each other and the song.
To expand on the previous poster's comment about HLAE , afterglow actually has a really in depth tutorial on how to use HLAE for 3rd person shots on his youtube channel.
I'm not a phenomenal editor or jumper myself, so please don't take any of that as me talking crap. Just trying to help and provide some real constructive criticism. I love watching edits , good bad or otherwise because i know the amount of effort that goes into them. Good luck in the future dude, I hope you keep working on stuff.
